Daniel And Suria

A simple story with a meaning at the end, i told zielo and shes the only one that understands the meaning of the story, im not going to tell anyone else until the opportune moment, here it is, its called Daniel and Suria

100 years ago, two people met, one called Daniel and the Other Suria...
Daniel was a book seller, he saw Suria while she was visiting his shop.
Suria and Daniel Fell inlove with eachother at their first glance.
Daniel tried to meet with his lover, but she was blocked by her father, a strict man that only allowed men into the house if it was for his sake.
So Daniel and Suria met in a small abandoned house a few blocks away from the shop, every time they met, they made love and talked about the upcoming or past events, but suddenly, Daniel Couldnt take it any longer.
He told Suria that he was to save up all he could and take her away, to a different land, so that they may live in peace together always.
Half a year later...
Daniel had finally achieved his objective, he had finally mustered enough money to run away with Suria.
But Daniel hadnt seen his lover in some time, he was too busy working that he had forgotten to visit her regulary, he finally decided to pretend to make a work related call and find out about Suria, she had gone missing about two weeks earlier, and he was told that she was pregnant...
He began to Panic and he Ran, looking for his one and only, his life, his meaning...
nearly a month later, he got a call from a friend that Suria was found in the hospital, concieving their child.
He ran to the hospital and saw his lover, dead... She had died During conception and the baby had died with her...
Upon seeing his woman and their new baby dead, he began to die, he felt as if his skin decayed and his organs faded.
Weeks later, and after his former lover's burial he could take it anymore, he went to the grave, dug it up and in his mud covered hands he held a knife, and knife which carryed his ultimate fate, he looked at his partener and kissed her decayed face, he lay beside her and struck the knife into his chest....
But nothing had Changed, he struck again, and again, nothing was happening, he wasnt dieing, he wasnt feeling any pain for death can only happen once per life and he had felt the pain, the sadness, he was already dead, but his soul and body still tread the ground, there was no escape...

Whatcha think? i had to rush this since i had to go out with my friend, but i tried to throw the story as i made it, but yeah, tell me what you think!!!

Intresting i must go and ponder about this....

AH...uh....no........................

ehhhhhh....uhh..............um......AHA!.........no that aint right.......................

.....................................ah I GOT IT I THINK I GOT IT

So Daniel and Suria met in a small abandoned house a few blocks away from the shop, every time they met, they made love

'thats where i stopped'

Lmao Shen

Does this mean Daniel died from working long ago and Suria was very sad and lost her will to go on, and died, and Daniel's soul is too attached to Suria and cannot go to heaven?

Daniel basically died when Suria died, he planned his life for her, WITH her, so when she died giving birth, he basically died, and because death can only come once per life, he wasnt allowed to die again!

OMG!!!
I was looking for a story like this.
wanna kno why?
because it tells you the life of Ragafa and Zielo!!!!
jks, just Rag and a cookie
jks, again. it was a really good story, sad at the end. Make more!!!
(That would be like a awesome short story to right in English)

lol funny story o.o heeheh, i did, but it was in more detail

lol, A+?

Ragafa wrote:

Daniel basically died when Suria died, he planned his life for her, WITH her, so when she died giving birth, he basically died, and because death can only come once per life, he wasnt allowed to die again!

I was right, in a kind of way. I got that he mustve died beforehand, but how was a bit misleading.

OMG!!!
I was looking for a story like this.
wanna kno why?
because it tells you the life of Ragafa and Zielo!!!!
jks, just Rag and a cookie
jks, again. it was a really good story, sad at the end. Make more!!!
(That would be like a awesome short story to right in English)

OMG I WAS THINKING THAT THIS MORNING JANDO!!

Maybe you could say something like:

Daniel worked very hard to gather up the money, and once almost was hit by a falling ceiling tile in the factory (I don't care where he works).

Hm, you changed it up a little

yep, i tried to make it better (but i got like super confused while writing it o.o)

So....the writer is confused. LOL

nah did this like when i was about to fall asleep, so i felt a little distorted

LOL @ 'What were you smoking, Kish?'

lol i did that to tyra
She said something REALLY random and awkward, and i said 'what the hell do you smoke tyra?' and after a long pause i said 'can i have some?' o.o

lol im the one that said what were u smoking kish

whats a kish?? =P

a kish is a ragafa.

whats a ragafa =/
=P
(yea im bored)

ragafa is a human

I thought a ragafa was a kish?
and a MS avatar =P

ragafa = kish, miska, rag etc